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Not going to lie Damien's plan was really stupid.

If Raisor died in front of his bakery, he probably would've been held responsible for it. The CFIA was already on him for the salty bagels, if a local celebrity like Raisor died because of them people would absolutely blame him for it.

You make a very good point, I apologise if you were disappointed! I only took out around 3-4 days to write the whole script so I had a feeling it would be dodgy in some areas.

I'm really glad you brought this to my attention though! I'll try to do better next time!

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It's not a bad thing per say. He was pretty desperate, and it's not like he's made out to be some super genius or whatever. 

Plus it does fit nicely with the scene about how there was seemingly no motive- killing Raisor to give the place publicity is something so unusual roman never considered it. It works quite well as a half-baked plan in-universe.

I actually wanted to mention that! I just preferred reflecting a little when giving a response rather than some "no, my writing is awesome 100% perfect, you're wrong" nonsense.

I like the way you've given respect to it and looked back on a different perspective, so I'd like to mention from your original comment, "the CFIA was already on him" the CFIA is just a real food agency (not as popular as the FDA so I never expected people to know that, I won't lie. Plus its kinda hard to tell where the fiction starts and ends.) And it's shown in the rat story through an easily missed newspaper that the ban was going to apply to all bakeries anyway, not just damiens. (despite how stupid the idea of banning a common baked good is, can you imagine if they randomly banned brownies?)

I'm glad about your analysis in this discussion, have a nice day!